Original Letter:
Over the past six years, each morning, as soon as my students walk in the door… I am so happy to see them again and see my classroom take on life again.
Corrected Letter:
Each morning for the past six years, I have been happy to see my students walk through the classroom door.
Explanation:
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Second Correction
Original Letter:
It feels so natural to me to be a primary school teacher.
Corrected Letter:
Being a primary school teacher comes so naturally to me.
Explanation:
Third Correction
Original Letter:
Yet for the past few months I am longing for and thinking about a new personal challenge.
Corrected Letter:
Nevertheless for the past few months I have been contemplating a new personal challenge.
Explanation:
Fourth Correction
Original Letter:
..it is a relatively young international school and I would like to be a member of a pioneering and ambitious team.
Corrected Letter:
it is a relatively young, international school, where I could be part of a pioneering and ambitious team.
Explanation:
Fifth Correction
Original Letter:
Last, I value the fact that the experience of living in Amsterdam and the Netherlands are being used and added to within the multicultural setting of your school, as I think this city and also the Dutch culture have much to offer
Corrected Letter:
I also like the fact it is a Dutch subsidised school with competitive fees and open doors to a variety of students.
Explanation:
Sixth Correction
Original Letter:
But in view of my university education, teaching secondary school students might be a future job possibility to me.
Corrected Letter:
In view of my university education, teaching in the secondary school might be a future possibility as well.
Explanation:
Seventh Correction
Original Letter:
I am an open minded person with excellent social skills. I tolerate pressure easily.
Corrected Letter:
As a colleague you will find that I have an open mind, good social skills and an ability to handle pressure easily.
Explanation:
Eighth Correction
Original Letter:
..value would be added value to your organisation by...
Corrected Letter:
I would add value to your organisation.
Explanation:
Second Correction
Original Letter:
It feels so natural to me to be a primary school teacher.
Corrected Letter:
Being a primary school teacher comes so naturally to me.
Explanation:
Third Correction
Original Letter:
Yet for the past few months I am longing for and thinking about a new personal challenge.
Corrected Letter:
Nevertheless for the past few months I have been contemplating a new personal challenge.
Explanation:
Fourth Correction
Original Letter:
..it is a relatively young international school and I would like to be a member of a pioneering and ambitious team.
Corrected Letter:
it is a relatively young, international school, where I could be part of a pioneering and ambitious team.
Explanation:
Fifth Correction
Original Letter:
Last, I value the fact that the experience of living in Amsterdam and the Netherlands are being used and added to within the multicultural setting of your school, as I think this city and also the Dutch culture have much to offer
Corrected Letter:
I also like the fact it is a Dutch subsidised school with competitive fees and open doors to a variety of students.
Explanation:
Sixth Correction
Original Letter:
But in view of my university education, teaching secondary school students might be a future job possibility to me.
Corrected Letter:
In view of my university education, teaching in the secondary school might be a future possibility as well.
Explanation:
Seventh Correction
Original Letter:
I am an open minded person with excellent social skills. I tolerate pressure easily.
Corrected Letter:
As a colleague you will find that I have an open mind, good social skills and an ability to handle pressure easily.
Explanation:
Eighth Correction
Original Letter:
..value would be added value to your organisation by...
Corrected Letter:
I would add value to your organisation.
Explanation:
